Rebecca Moran
Professor Henderson
Academic Writing
2 March 2011
Censorship of the American Classic, The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, Is Absolutely Not the Answer
Should any person change Michelangelo’s painting in the Sisitine chapel, or Rodin’s world famous sculpture, The Thinking Man, or even Leonardo Divinci’s masterpiece, The Mona Lisa? The answer would be absolutely not. The censorship of the great American classic novel, The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn by Mark Twain, is comparable and is completely wrong. This great American classic should be considered a work of art that should never be altered. The argument of censorship of Huckleberry fin is a hot topic of debate today. The Lufkin Daily News published an editorial on January 6, 2011 titled: “Huck Fin: Censorship? Sure, it is, but Changes to ‘Huckleberry Finn’ Are Warranted. In this editorial, the authors claim that the word “nigger” should be replaced with the word “slave”. The editor’s purpose is to gain support for the censorship of this book instead of banning it, so that younger children are able to read it. The Lufkin Daily News is correct that the language in this novel is not appropriate for younger children, but it should not be banned to older students who would be able to discuss it in a sophisticated, understanding, and respectful way. Mark Twain is an amazing and gifted author who is able to take the reader on a journey back in time and see the reality of the American culture in the 1800s. It is through his use of certain words and descriptions, that the reader is able to get a taste of the harsh reality during this troubled time period. By altering Twain’s writing, one would be robbing the reader of a potentially life-changing experience.
The Adventures of Huckleberry Fin by Mark Twain was published in 1884, only 19 years after the Civil War ended. Even at the beginning of the novel’s publication, it stirred up much controversy. A month after its publication many libraries banned the book, calling it "tawdry" and its narrative voice "coarse" and "ignorant." In the 1950s, the novel had strong criticism due to its racial content. In Arizona in 1988, a parent sued her school district, claiming: “that making Twain's novel required high school reading made already existing racial tensions even worse” (History 4) . Even through all this fiery debate, the novel has remained unchanged, and for good reason. There are many who realize the importance and significance of the novel’s content. Twain was not writing in a disrespectful way by any means, but rather he was displaying the cruel cold reality of America back in the days of slavery. Twain was able to display most perfectly the intolerance, injustice, suppression, and the ignorance that was demonstrated by many white people against people of color. By eliminating the N-word, which in retrospective was used quite often, the reader does not get the full experience Twain was trying convey to his audience.
The authors of the Lufkin editorial stated: “Twain books are too important to be shelved, which is what’s happening. The new versions, for those readers who prefer them, or for lower level grades in our schools, are appropriate” (Lufkin Daily News 3). This statement does not acknowledge that the Mark Twain’s audience includes adults who are able to understand and interpret Twain’s message in an appropriate fashion. The books are only being shelved from those who are not fit to read it, but older children and adults continue to read the American classic. The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn is inarguably an advanced text. How many children are actually reading and fully understanding the content of Mark Twain novels? This literary masterpiece was not written with the intent of young children reading it. Upon the novel’s first publication, a librarian wrote to Mark Twain asking him to defend his books. Twain stated with confidence:
"I am greatly troubled by what you say. I wrote 'Tom Sawyer' & 'Huck Finn' for adults exclusively, & it always distressed me when I find that boys and girls have been allowed access to them. The mind that becomes soiled in youth can never again be washed clean. I know this by my own experience, and to this day I cherish an unappeased bitterness against the unfaithful guardians of my young life, who not only permitted but compelled me to read an unexpurgated Bible through before I was 15 years old. None can do that and ever draw a clean sweet breath again on this side of the grave” (able2know.org).
Twain states clearly that he did not write this story for children and did not have any intent of “soiling” the minds of children. He wrote this novel for the adult audience; if Twain wished for children to read the novel then he would have made the text much simpler with less vulgar language. It is not the right of others to change Twain’s words in his story.
Marcus Tullius Cicero, a well-respected Roman writer, speaker, philosopher and politician (106-43BC), once brilliantly stated, “Not to know what happened before you were born is to remain forever a child” (Cicero Quotes 6). Here, Cicero meant that if one does not learn from the past then they are considered to be ignorant, just like a child. By banning the Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, we are depriving young adults of a very valuable lesson. We must allow them to read this book and allow them to get swept off into a world full of ignorance, hatred, and injustice. It is when the reader is able to feel these emotions; they are able to learn from the failures of America’s past and strive for a brighter future. Through this novel, they learn that the language and treatment of the people of color was undeniably wrong. By observing the wrongs of past American society, people can learn how to make things right here and now and in the future.
The Lufkin Daily News distressfully stated: "The problem with keeping the text of Huck Fin and Tom Sawyer intact in schools, instead of banning the book-because that creates an outrage of its own-are simply not assigning it to students anymore. And that's a shame” (Lufkin Daily News). If we have children read it when they are younger with or without the N-word, it would be a waste of time. The thrill in reading this American classic is the exposure of the dark chapters of America during the time of slavery. It is through this experience that the novel has survived and is considered to be an American classic. If the novel is banned from all schools or censored, then it would take Twain’s intended experience away and The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn would just be another book lost in history. And that would be the ultimate shame.
Works Cited
"When Censorship Goes Monkey-Fighting Bad...." Ask an Expert at Able2know - Ask Questions, Share Answers. 5 Jan. 2011. Web. 28 Feb. 2011.
"Twain Publishes The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn — History.com This Day in History — 2/18/1885." History.com — History Made Every Day — American & World History. 18 Feb. 2011. Web. 28 Feb. 2011.
"Marcus Tullius Cicero Quotes." Share Book Recommendations With Your Friends, Join Book Clubs, Answer Trivia. Web. 28 Feb. 2011.
Rebecca,
ReplyDeleteOverall I enjoyed reading the first draft of your rebuttal and hearing your ideas and perspectives on the proposed censorship of Huckleberry Finn. You have several very strong points in there, many of which are very persuasive. I found myself nodding in agreement to much of what you were saying, which is always a good thing when reading a paper—especially one that is arguing one side of a two-sided debate.
What I would improve:
1. Firstly, your opening is somewhat weak. Starting with a question isn’t the best way to open the debate. Starting broad and narrowing the scope down to your main point or argument (thesis) for the paper does indeed work and can work well, but here it seems a little ineffective. Perhaps start on a smaller scale, with something less broad, and try to avoid rhetorical questions in the very beginning (keep in mind that that is only my personal preference).
2. Your intro is also rather long. Try condensing it into a more succinct and sharp opening to make a dramatic entrance into the debate. Do not disregard many of your arguments, however; use them later in the paper in body paragraphs rather than at the beginning. Integration is key here—either add them to a new paragraph or incorporate them into an existing one.
3. Work on transitions. The paper comes off a little choppy as a result of jumpy transitioning. For instance, in the middle of the paper when you say “The authors of the Lufkin editorial stated:…” it came off as a little jarring and left me wondering whether I had missed something that was supposed to come before. Make sure transitions are there and work well so that this does not happen in your final draft.
4. Condense the one quotation by Twain. It’s a little too long. While it is pertinent and a good source, try to either condense it to be no more than 3 lines, or break it up into pieces so that you can analyze it with more confidence.
Those are my suggestions. Just remember to always ask yourself “Why?” whenever you make a new claim. Clarify what you mean so there is no room for a counter-rebuttal. Knock the competition off their feet by giving them nothing to argue.
This is an overall promising draft. Good luck with your revision!
Ethan Wennberg
Becca,
ReplyDeleteAfter a few readings of your first draft I can tell you have a lot of ideas about how you want to present the argument. I really like how you gave this history surrounding Huck Finn's controversy. I think it adds a great context to your rebuttal. I understand that it is very difficult to research. I had plenty of trouble myself. I think if you search just a bit more you'll find some really great evidence against banning books, censorship, etc.
Some things to note:
You start the essay with an incredibly strong tone. This is not bad, however it kind of drops off at points. Just remember to stay as consistent as possible you tone. Also, try to be more concise with your draft. It felt like at some points you didn't know what to say, and just put in some filler. Remember that it's important to get to the point. Finally, go deeper in your analysis of quotes and information. Remember how I said it seems like you have plenty of ideas? This is where that comes in. Take a moment to think about how you'll say it and you'll answer the "So What?" on everyone's mind.
Overall, this is a good start. Don't give up on research, and take an extra second to think about your diction and structure, and you'll do great!
Best,
Mark
Becca,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your paper on the censorship of Huck Finn. Personally, I completely agree with your perspective. Just a few notes:
Try to condense your introduction. I really liked the way you compared Twain’s American Classic with art of Michelangelo, Rodin and Divinci. It sets the stage for your argument that classics should not be changed. I was a bit confused when you said: “The censorship… is comparable and is completely wrong.” What exactly did you mean by comparable? Also I think saying “completely wrong” in the introduction is too strong. Rather, I would save it later once your points have been established.
I really liked the second paragraph that gives the historical context about Huck Finn. Toward the end of your paragraph you said “by eliminating the N-word” I think it would be a stronger voice if you said “nigger” instead of censoring yourself.
In the next paragraph that started with Lufkin, I was a bit confused who Lufkin was. I remember reading that name earlier and I had to go back and check where I had seen it. I think it would be effective if you shortly reintroduced Lufkin.
That’s all my critics, good luck with your revisions!
~Christina
Becca,
ReplyDeleteAlthough some may say that asking questions isn't a good way to start an argument, I happen to think that it gets the brain going and thinking. The Michael Angelo comment was a good way to get my attention because it related to something I know about. I also liked how you turned around Twains usage of the N-word in saying that he only used it to show how cruel Americans were in the past. Overall, I think your essay has a lot of potential and is coming out to be a strong argument. The facts that you give bout the background surrounding Huck Finn were also very crucial to giving background information on your topic.
Of course, there are some things that I think could be worked on only to make your paper even stronger. The paragraph regarding Lufkin came right out in the middle of the paper. Maybe leading into it with more flow will help the reader become more comfortable with that material. I also agree with Ethan above when he says to condense the quote by Mark Twain. Since it is such a strong source being Mark Twain, I think if your were to condense it, it would give you more of an opportunity to go into detail about the meaning of the quote.
In all, I think you should keep at it and I'm sure your argument will all fall into place. I know this is a hard topic to research considering how recent it is and that the people doing it in class said they seemed to have trouble finding things. Just keep researching and don't get stressed out. Good luck on your changes.
Best of Luck,
Jake
Rebecca,
ReplyDeleteOverall, your essay was very good. I liked the very beginning where you compared The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn to other classic works such as The Mona Lisa and the painting in the Sistine Chapel. I felt that your entire first paragraph was giving the reader a guilt trip. For instance, you called reading Huck Finn a potentially life-changing experience. I think the whole guilty conscience style is a good technique to prove your point. However, I thought the introduction was a bit lengthy. Since the first two paragraphs is your introduction, try condensing the first two paragraphs into one.
I also liked your quote from Mark Twain when he described his work. That quote was perfect for your essay and a very strong source. But I think that you could maybe cut out the last sentence of the quote. Twain is speaking very creatively and that last sentence is hard to understand. You could add your own input about the quote to make up for the lost words. But for the most part, great draft and good luck.
Greg
Hey Becca!
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you incorporated Huckleberry's Finn history with censorship. I think this gives the readers a better understand of the debatable issue and puts a better picture in their minds. It made me realize that the censorship issues with Mark Twain's novel has been going on for a longer time than I was aware.
I also enjoyed your 5th paragraph. I thought the Cicero quote was really strong and effective. Your reason and support within that paragraph are organized and purposeful.
Here are a few things I would think about:
Your introduction is very wordy and I would try to condense your thoughts. You have a numerous amount of good points, but I think they would be more effective in different paragraphs.
Many sentences could even be combined. For example, the two sentences: "This great American classic should be considered a work of art that should never by altered. The argument of censorship of Huckleberry Fin is a hot topic of debate today." You can change it to something like this: The censorship of the American work of art, Huckleberry Fin, is a hot topic of debate today.
You can combine a few sentences like this in your first paragraph. Combining the sentences will condense your thoughts in your introduction and you will be able to get your point across to the reader more thoroughly.
I would also work on your claim. Your claim of: "By altering Twain's writing, one would be robbing the reader of a potentially life-changing experience" does not really have to do with your specific reasons you are expressing. You could be more specific in your claim; it is too broad.
Also, by reading your thesis, I, as a reader, do not really understand what you are going to present to me in your argument.
Even though your second paragraph is effective, it seems as though you have numerous points in it. You could break this paragraph down into smaller paragraphs. This will make it easier for the reader to read.
Like your introduction, your conclusion is also very wordy and has different ideas being expressed. You could also try to condense this paragraph as well. For example, the last few sentences are a tiny bit unnecessary. I would either take these out or try to combine them.
I would also work on transitions throughout your paper. Your argument lacks flow within paragraphs. Especially, the last few paragraphs you have, the transition is very choppy. Try adding a sentence or two to connect them.
I hope this is helpful for you!
I really enjoyed your first draft and good luck on your revisions!
-Joni Fromer
Dear Becca,
ReplyDeleteYour paper was an enjoyable argument to read. I thought you had quite a strong opening, though I do think some of your thoughts in the first paragraph were a bit scattered. It may be possible for your first paragraph to be broken into two.
I thought that your essay was well-organized in the aspect that it sort of revolved around young people as your central argument. I enjoyed your use of quotations, but I think you may even be able to put a few more in for credible sources.
My favorite part of your essay was your Cicero reference. Cool. Your Twain quote that is blocked may also be condensed.
Overall, very good first draft. If I were to choose a few things to focus on in your next, it would just be condensing some of your thoughts/editing paragraph lengths and maybe adding in a few more credible sources. Great job! Good luck on your revision.
- Greg
Great start to your paper, very pathos charged and really enjoyed the comparison with Michelangelo, which I think fits very well with the occasion. Also, you did a nice job providing background information on the novel and the main debate surrounding it in the intro as well as the second paragraph.
ReplyDeleteYou've created a rebuttal with both refutations and mostly counter arguments, which I thought was nicely done and reflect logos.
My main concern is with your selection of sources. Besides the History channel, the two other sources do not seem very professional sources to use to back your arguments. But I do understand that it must be difficult to find a source that relates to this opinion based debate. You also mention Lufkin Daily news within the paper however, do not provide a full citation in the final bibliography.
I hope this helps and good luck with the rest of your paper!
Adiba Afros
Becca,
ReplyDeleteI think you start off with a great introduction. Comparing all those famous pieces of artwork to changing the book was very creative and it works. I also liked the way you analyzed Twain's writing, it was very well done.
The only thing I would suggest you doing is introducing your sources better. This way the readers will get a better feel of how credible the source is.
Overall I think you did a good job getting your claim across all through outthe essay.
Good luck,
Dan Sheldon
Becca,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your first draft. You made a lot of strong arguments supported by good reasoning. However, it may have had more pull if that reasoning was supported by more credible sources. I'm doing my rebuttal on the same paper and I found a really hard time finding scholarly sources, but in reading your paper, I see why the incorporation of a credible source is necessary and would add the argument's effectiveness by giving it more evidence to convince the reader.
The main point I got out of the paper was that there is no need to censor Huck Finn because those who really could grasp the concept are old enough to be subjected to the N-word. I think that you effectively backed up this point with useful quotes and examples. However, I think that you should draw some focus on the fact that young kids do read this book, and these are the ones who would be getting the censored version. Maybe try and find more sources to help you form this argument.
I really like the incorporation of the Cicero quote. Perhaps you could put that in the conclusion to give your argument more support in the end. It really ties together the whole argument that censorship is not only unnecessary, but would deprive many of the lessons the book evokes.
Good work and good luck!
~Molly
Becca,
ReplyDeleteGood first draft overall. You seem to really have a great point to work off of. I found myself swayed by your argument which is always a good indication of writing ability and the writer's ability to convey their purpose.
Like some have stated, try to condense your introduction. Sometimes copy-editing is the hardest thing to do in an essay, but in order to not have your audience lose the point, clear and concise is always the best route (Even if more information can be added - if so try and incorporate that throughout the essay instead of just one paragraph). I would also suggest that you pay attention to transitions and introductory sentences to paragraphs. In regards to the latter, just make sure you summarize your points before expanding into detail.
I really enjoyed the Cicero quote. It was beautifully explained and executed. It really made me think. Excellent job on finding that source.
Overall great draft. Good luck. It is very promising.
Molly Schneider
Becca,
ReplyDeleteI think this is a pretty good first draft. I think that the quotes you use, although there are not many, support your point really well. I especially liked the ones from Twain and Cicero. I think they said exactly what you needed them to say, and bravo for finding them!
There were 2 parts where I got confused. The first is in the intro paragraph when you say "...but it should not be banned to older students..." This was confusing because I was wondering if the article mentioned this as a potential plan of action for the book or where it came from. It just didn't seem really relevant and so it was confusing to me.
The other part that was confusing was in the conclusion when you said that children reading the book, edited or not, would be a waste of time. I don't really understand this. Isn't this kind of supporting the point of view opposite of what you are trying to say?
Other than these 2 parts, I thought the paper was well written and the language you use is good! There were just a few really minor other things that I saw, but other than that, I enjoyed reading your paper a lot! Great work!
- Lindsay
Becca,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on the rebuttal paper! I chose the same editorial to rebut, so I had a common train of thought with you. First of all, AMAZING introduction! Don’t change that at all; it introduced the editorial and brought in pieces of work familiar to the common person in a very professional sounding and authoritative way. Great job with that! Also, your title was very informative, and let me as a reader know your point of view before even starting to read it. Your use of acknowledgment and response in the 1st paragraph was very effective in that you took the editorial’s main point and shut it down with a better thought process. You make very good points within your rebuttal that reduce the credibility of the editorial and make the reader more likely to follow your claim. Your use of research and quotes very was very effective in furthering your claim. Along with those quotes, you had sufficient lead in and follow up explanations to really help the reader understand all material present. I was also impressed with your use of lead-ins for your quotes such as “brilliantly stated” in the 5th paragraph as well as “distressfully stated” in the 6th. It really just helps display your opinion of the quote and your direction with the use of that quote.
However, at the end of the 3rd paragraph, I was unsure if you knew about the block quote. It seems long enough for it, but all you have to do is indent the entire quote and erase the quotation marks. It is a great quote though.
Also, your parenthetical citations were hard to follow because they were not the first word on your works cited page. I had to search through that last page to find out which source you were talking about. I’m not sure if this is correct, but I added my editorial on my works cited page. Since you used it, I feel that it should be present.
Since I used this topic as well, it is interesting to see the same editorial rebutted but with the use of different claims and points. You are on your way to a great rebuttal paper; great job so far! Good luck with your revisions!
--Ethan Freedman
Becca,
ReplyDeleteI think that overall you are of to a good start with your first draft. I wrote about the same topic and also had some issues finding a lot of sources, which seems to be a problem you may have run into while writing this.
Your first paragraph could probably be split up a little more, just to make a clear difference between your claim that you are making and your first body paragraph. These two seem a bit meshed together which can be a little confusing for the reader.
In your second paragraph you mention that ever since the initial publication of Huck Finn, it stirred up much controversy. This is true, but readers who do not know this may need some proof to back up this statement so that they know your overall argument is credible. In other words, just give a little bit of proof here.
Your quote by Mark Twain should be in block quotes, but I am not sure if that is just a formatting error due to the blog post or because you forgot. Either way, I would just be aware of that. At this point in your paper though, I think your claim seems a little lost, and I had a hard time following what point exactly you were trying to prove. Your Cicero reference and quote also seem to contradict your quote, so clarifying your intentions by using that reference would be helpful in strengthening your argument.
By the end your argument is sort of lost, which happens a lot of the time. Be sure that in your conclusion you rap up your argument and tie all of your reasons and evidence back to your main point and claim, to bring the reader full circle.
Good job with your first draft and good luck with your final!
-Meredith Bempkins
Rebecca,
ReplyDeleteI think that this is a great first draft. You were able to clearly present many valid arguments against the censorship of such a great book. That being said, I believe that there are a few ways to improve these articles and boost your credibility.
Specifically, you tend to censor yourself by saying "the N-word". I think that by doing this your are contradicting yourself. Along with this, I think you need to back up some of your claims a little bit more. For instance, in your second paragraph, you state that libraries called the book "tawdry, coarse, and ignorant" but didn't state where you got that information from.
I really enjoyed the fact that you quoted Mark Twain in your paper. I think that the author's opinion on the matter is very important although I think the quote could be shorter. A way to do this is by cutting off the quote after the words "washed clean". I think that the rest of the quote isn't necessary for the reader to see.
The Cicero quote was really interesting. It gives the paper a new sort of perspective. I think this was very strong.
Well done! This is a great start! Good luck writing the rest of it!
Elizabeth Rubel
Hi Rebecca, I just wanted to take the time to briefly go over some things you may need to work on in this essay. For one, you want to try to abstain from really long and condensed sentences. This is often the cause for run-on sentences, which prevents you from being able to convey your thoughts proficiently. Also, it would help to look back at your thesis occasionally when you're writing. This helps make your argument more strong, and will allow you to keep concise. Other than that, you were proficient in expressing your claim, not to mention you introduced some very interesting information. That said, should you follow those suggestions, it should help you incorporate those evidences sufficiently, making your piece stronger.
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ReplyDeleteHi Rebecca!
ReplyDeleteI though this essay was really well done! I thought you brought up good quotes and ideas which really backed up your claim. I thought that you put your opinion in your essay quite nicely. I thought that the way you started your essay was really good but I think you should use more examples which might offend people. The thinking man works because people might take offense to his nudity but I think that perhaps using another work of art besides those like the Mona Lisa would make more on an impact because no one can really be offended by the Mona Lisa like they can to Huckleberry Finn.
I thought that your Mark Twain quote was one of your best parts because it was the greatest piece of evidence you have towards your claim. I think that some of your statements are a bit out of context and its hard to find your point clearly in some places.
This was a very interesting read and I can't wait to see how the final product comes out!